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perfect smile
perfect hair
perfect skin
they are just that perfect person
 
but is that true?
a perfect you?
who eyes tell no story
who walks with pride
never knowing pain
sheltered from hell
 
but they are what you call perfect
can't perfect be something else?
some who can't smile
but yet they try
it's just they've been through so much
there face will always be a frown
 
scuffed up skin
bent and broken
knowing what hell is
and open to the world around them
never going by first impression
 
what is truly perfect?
perfect by flaws ?
perfect by nature?
perfect by being?
 
well there will only be one answer
perfect by you 
 
it's late and honestly I don't know... i'll have to reread it after I get some sleep
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Zparx123 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014
So... Beautiful! Big happycry Cheers and Applause - NaNoEmo Day 8 
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ayakonight Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
than you ^.^
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Zparx123 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014
You are welcome!
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ayakonight Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
^.^ you are awesome, just thought I should let you know
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Zparx123 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014
Thank you! You are awesomer.
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ayakonight Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
can't be I meant can't be
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ayakonight Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
can be awesome with out awesome people like you
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Zparx123 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014
? *confused face* ok
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ayakonight Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
yeah that didn't work too well sorry XI
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eltraumado Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Student Interface Designer
Apollo bless you, for my feelings are portrayed
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ayakonight Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :heart:
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YumeYorunotenshi Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome poem! It's well-written and the subject matter is on one of my favorite topics. 
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ayakonight Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist

thank you :)

and yeah being perfect is one of those topics that people will debate about all the time, honestly, what do you think perfect is?

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YumeYorunotenshi Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
To me, perfect is subjective, therefore a meaningless word in my book. I don't mean to sound pessimistic or anything, but there really is no true and solid definition of perfect in this world, as is the same for "normal" and "sane". The definitions of these, though not in a dictionary, are always changing their standards of what is and isn't in the category of the word.

Going off of that, I would agree with you that perfection is, and remains, what you make of it. Even with the mistakes we all make, even with all the crap chiseling away at us.

Sorry if that was long-winded... ^^; but that's what I think.
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ayakonight Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist

I agree with you 110%

and I don't mine long-winded stuff on a topic like this :)

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this my dear,is perfectly written..........
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ayakonight Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :3
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DragonMakara Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014
I love it! ^~^
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ayakonight Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you
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TheHopeNeverDies Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I really love your poem, the idea of perfection is always one that keeps me up at night :0
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ayakonight Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
yeah I know, I wrote this at like midnight because I couldn't sleep ...
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Dreamartgirl Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
There is no one perfect, being perfect is impossible everyone has a flaw.
You can't be perfect but you can be you
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ayakonight Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist

I just think perfect is just an opinion "in the eyes of the beholder" any one can be perfect

but that is just my thought

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NanaThatha Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
really good!
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ayakonight Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :heart:
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NanaThatha Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Hug 
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daybreaksmiles Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
lots of potential here, a few awkward phrases, but a beautiful concept
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ayakonight Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist

thank you

what phrases did you think were awkward? just so I got an idea what to work on.

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daybreaksmiles Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
line 6 you ask "a perfect you?" and it doesn't quite make sense, because you are talking about another person and their perfection and the things that make them perfect. I don't know what you were trying to say but that phrase is a little off.
line 7 - should be "whose" instead of "who"
2nd to last line, you could probably take out the "well", it would make a stronger impact

mostly small stuff, fix those and it'll be perfect :hug:
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ayakonight Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
oh and if you want to take a look at some of my other poems and give me some advice that would be great :) but only if you have the time and want to
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daybreaksmiles Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
sure thing!
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ayakonight Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
mmmmkay thanks
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PlisPlox Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Monkeythumbplz love it
but i think that there's no such thing as a perfect person ....just saying Masato Inohara (So I hurd) [V9]
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ayakonight Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist

thank you

I just think perfect is just an opinion "in the eyes of the beholder" any one can be perfect

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PlisPlox Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
also true 
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ayakonight Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
yeah >.<
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